Strategies for improvement time
Okay number one, move a little further from the mic and improve your volume, that increases clarity. 2, only spit your rhymes on beat. Dont think youre clever and try to incorporate 75 words onto one beat and still think your on beat. It wont work man but keep workin on dat in private. DONT SWAGGER. Youre unknown so we dont actuallly know if your doin that on purpose or naturally. Make your words make sense, dont use words that only the uber-geek has heard and understands just because it rhymes. If you dont have a word that rhymes find a metaphor or similie that does. SAY YOUR WORDS WITH FEELING MAN! Dont be all blah blah blah or we dont wana listen. Go for gold man! Also u edited your voice somehow , take it off or change that last sound to something else.
Gwan man im gunna b bak 2 hear da finished version coz i think u got potential.
Sfe.