Hmmm its a little underactive
Your drum pattern is top notch but those melodies are a bit simplistic and annoying. Not to say that simple is ineffective but its just been done a little wrong. For your type of style i suggest listening to some of the late Jay Dee's beats as i can see your looking for a somewhat soulful and relaxing tune here.
Keep going ull get it! u got ma bak man!
thanks for the input ill check jay dee out for sure
Very Original
You really came out of the box for this one and it was well worth it. Continue ur excellence
reeeeehhhhhhhhh gwwaaaan!!!!!
Dat beat is sikkkk but true say bruv dat part of the 007 tune has been done to death brov but u did it wiv sum extra flair. Beg u lemmi use dis beat b - hit me up on clintdominique@hotmail.com
This is noise
I suggest you skip right to advice rather than personal response.
Personal response: This is very horrible. I cant believe you call this hip-hop. This...there isn't a word powerful enough to describe this, however, im sure if i were to look up shit in a thesaurus, i may find it.
Advice: Research hip hop tracks to gain a clearer understanding of them. Producers to look up are the top 3, Kanye West, The Neptunes and Timbaland.
I use to be a huge "rap" fan. I had like every Enimen CD. But that was the old days.
Pretty good sampling
You sampled incredibly well here just need a little more practice on keeping the beat steady. I'd gladly rap on it for you lol but you're guna have to fix it so its always on beat. Otherwise it was a pleasure listening to.
yea i got chu its just i was to lazy to really put work n tha track but im gonna fix tho
CrAz3
FUCKIN HELL
You are sick. You get me? SO SICK. So flippin sick. You are awesome. Period. GWAN!
hahaha, thank you really much
Fantastic
Perfection my friend perfection! This WILL go gold just give it a little while. You truly captured the jazz essence here
Do you mind if i sample this for a hip hop tune? Feel free to say no if you wish just keep makin more of this for me to listen to!
Go for it, I don't mind. Thanks for the review :D
Strategies for improvement time
Okay number one, move a little further from the mic and improve your volume, that increases clarity. 2, only spit your rhymes on beat. Dont think youre clever and try to incorporate 75 words onto one beat and still think your on beat. It wont work man but keep workin on dat in private. DONT SWAGGER. Youre unknown so we dont actuallly know if your doin that on purpose or naturally. Make your words make sense, dont use words that only the uber-geek has heard and understands just because it rhymes. If you dont have a word that rhymes find a metaphor or similie that does. SAY YOUR WORDS WITH FEELING MAN! Dont be all blah blah blah or we dont wana listen. Go for gold man! Also u edited your voice somehow , take it off or change that last sound to something else.
Gwan man im gunna b bak 2 hear da finished version coz i think u got potential.
Sfe.
Thanks for the suggestions, I was sort of in another state of mind when I wrote this, if you know what I mean. that might explain a few things. like the meowing. as for the big words, not everything I do is like that, but I wanted to have a song to show off my vocabulary... as much as I love rapping about "times" and "crimes" and the "throw-down" at the "ho-down" I wanted to write something a little more cerebral. but Im not saying its good. I just made it for fun and practice... thank you for your review
Ahh dude wtf!!!
I swear down i would have given you a str8 10 yh but bruv to me it sounds like youre missin a couple beats in ur drumline. Maybe its jus me but stil bruv das hyyppee. Lemmi rap on dat.
eh man thanx go ahead but send it to me when u done
Pretty damn good
One of the best ive heard today, just dat bass click... maybe some harmonising melodies too an dis iz gold.
yeah i'm going to fix that.
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